content(proposal): rewrite Arabic copy, reprice to 900k, drop support scope
Proposal microsite for Nady El-Seid mobile app (sayd-mobile).
Arabic copy:
- Fix agreement/tamyiz errors: اكتملت العدد -> اكتمل العدد,
متأخر يومان -> يومين, "92 يوم" -> "92 يومًا", منها 214 متأخر -> متأخرًا,
يومان تدريب -> يوما تدريب (dual mudaf drops nun)
- Fix ambiguous/wrong forms: فيتحدث رصيده -> فيُحدَّث رصيده فورًا,
الحمام الأولمبي -> حمام السباحة الأولمبي
- Remove translationese: comma-lists rewritten with و, passives given
back their agents, Egyptian تشتغلون -> تبدأون التشغيل
- Unify register to plural address (اضغط -> اضغطوا, شاهد -> شاهدوا)
- Apply reviewed headline/lede/ROI rewrites with corrected orthography
Commercial terms:
- Price 700,000 -> 900,000 EGP; breakdown rebased to sum exactly
(400k app + 290k portal + 110k gate/invites + 100k integration)
- Remove all post-launch support: annual maintenance contract, 6 free
months, 1-year warranty, 99.5% SLA, first-year store fees. Delivery
and release only, stated explicitly in a "غير مشمول" block and FAQ
- Payments 40/30/20/10 -> 40/25/35: signing, data-entry plan approved
+ club opens required accounts and services, completed delivery
- Timeline week 1-2 renamed to cover data-entry planning and names the
account-opening as a parallel club obligation
Co-Authored-By:
Claude Opus 5 (1M context) <noreply@anthropic.com>
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